Wednesday, October 21, 2009

sad song





i woke up at dawn
in total despair
my baby was gone
i woke up at dawn
i put my hat on
it just wasn't fair
i woke up at dawn
in total despair

the sun was shining
outside in the street
my heart was pining
the sun was shining
i started whining
and shuffling my feet
the sun was shining
outside in the street

a tear from my eye
dropped on the sidewalk
i started to cry
a tear from my eye
away would not fly
in a state of shock
a tear from my eye
dropped on the sidewalk

all you sad lovers
attend my sad song
a rainbow covers
all you sad lovers
but darkness hovers
to sweep you along
all you sad lovers
attend my sad song




this is an attempt at the triolet form.

2 comments:

Jon said...

wow! i like the way that you've worked these into a sequence... and even though the subject matter is kind of sad and like a fall day, it brightened my day...

thanks timmy

Harlequin said...

agree,agree--- I quite enjoyed this, also the way you have played around internally in the verses
I have been working away at my own and an now even more motivated... thanks, timmy